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I decided to split this body paragraph into two, as I felt it was too large and naturally moved on to a new idea. I also added a few words here and there to give a bit more imagery and description.
“Although it may seem as such, I’m not saying that it’s bad to shut your brain off and enjoy a fun big-budget film, but it could become a problem when we no longer desire to consume anything else. Powerhouse franchises such as The Avengers and Harry Potter use a formula of storytelling that forces fans and their wallets to always come back and find out what happened to their favourite on-screen heroes. Although this is not bad in and of itself, it can lead to a vicious cycle of lazily written cash-grab films, as the producers know that fans will flock in the thousands to come and watch regardless.
Independent films don’t have this privilege, forcing them to put all of their efforts into making a piece of art that will speak for itself. A smaller budget will often lead to greater creativity and more genuine intentions when it comes to spreading a message or idea. For example, CGI is an expense that most low-budget films simply can’t afford, so they will resort to using practical effects and other creative techniques which are often far more memorable then some flashy, obnoxious special effects. This boosted creativity leads to a film that holds more artistic merit than your average Hollywood blockbuster, and one will still be discussed and examined for decades to come. I think that as fans of cinema, it is our duty to encourage independent films and help them get the recognition that they deserve. If we continue to support only what Hollywood spits out, we will just be encouraging them to continue their efforts and showing filmmakers everywhere that making formulaic blockbusters is the only way to survive in the industry. “
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I decided to rewrite my lead anecdote by removing myself and focusing on the video that I watched.
“It is a dark and misty night. The streets lay abandoned and silent, engulfed by a harsh moonlight. All of a sudden, you see something creeping along the dark and dingy alleyway in front of you. You hear the pitter-patter of claws against concrete as it rushes towards you, pouncing out of the shadows. Before you stands a creature the likes of which belong only in your worst nightmares. The being in question, half cat, half human, stares at you with vacant, soulless eyes. Just when you think things couldn’t get any worse, more of these monstrosities begin emerging from beyond. You begin to panic as they sing and dance around you, chanting as if they were performing some sort of sacrificial ritual. Have you died and gone to Hell? No, you’ve just watched the trailer for 2019’s Cats.”
Oliver Warne Nonfiction 